informative essay revision

https://cdnapisec.kaltura.com/index.php/extwidget/… THIS IS A LINK TO WATCH WHERE MY TEACHER BROKE DOWN AND WENT THROUGH EVERY PART OF MY ESSAY!! ESSAY IS ATTACHED BELOW! ONLY 5 PARAGRAPHS NEEDED BUT MUST BE AT LEAST 3-4 PAGES! PLEASE FOLLOW ALL OF HER SUGGESTIONS. MY THESIS STATEMENT IS: REALITY TV has exposed children and teenagers to obscene languages, images, and violence.

1) LANGUAGES

2) IMAGES

3)VIOLENCE

EACH BODY PARAGRAPH MUST COVER ONE OF THOSE “TOPICS”

MY THESIS MUST STAY THE SAME!!! PLEASE FOLLOW ALL OF THE TEACHERS INSTRUCTIONS!!!!!!! BUILD FROM MY OWN ESSAY AND EDIT WHAT IS NEEDED. THANK YOU !!!!!!!!!!!